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Apr 14, 2009

Lonesome Valley; Chapter 2

The Imprisonator


You work in the city police force, prowl the streets filled with vicious muggers, dope peddlers, crazy weirdos for 10 years and you expect a quiet desk job to while away your days in peace. You are 32 years old after all. Its time they let you relax. You apply to your pseudo-intellectual boss to shift you to a more peaceful job. The sanctimonious prick who loves to say " subtle" every 2-3 minutes, ignores it and puts you into the security cordon of an anal retentive politician who has been threatened by yet another psycho. Appears they both studied together at some big shot ivy league college or the other, your boss had some brotherly love to spare and also a few men from the force.

It appears the senator Johansen was told by somebody called "the emancipator" to mercy kill his only child suffering from cerebral palsy otherwise the crazy will have to assassinate him on moral and philosophical grounds. Slippery grounds, those. You never play there.


They have also given you an ivy league humanities graduate for a partner who is on a "being a good Samaritan" mission. Eloquence personified and apparelled in a Van Huesen suit. The bastard even quotes Shakespeare. Name's Edward Devereaux. Fancy pansy.


The threat came by the phone. Wonders of science are innumerable and unfathomable. No chance of catching the perp even after tracing the call but it was done anyway by the bright boys from communications. So here you are staking out a suburban villa of Godzillic proportions with manicured lawns and pedicured ladies. The matter is being splashed about in the news paper like beer in a bachelor party. There is always a small mob of T.V. reporters in front of the gate. You feel like a red assed monkey at a historical site, stared at, jeered at and being asked things you don't know.


He is coming out of his villa in his bullet proof luxury car that lets him ride out any storm inside watching porno and sipping beer ensconced in fragrant leather seats. You are not so lucky, you have to pave the way for his majesty's departure to the hospital to see his son.


Its not even been 40 minutes since his departure, you have just settled down to have your coffee and cigarette and Edward 'Eddie' deveraaux comes huffing and puffing, spills the coffee and starts coughing with a hanky on his mouth with his initials stencilled on it. This is supposed to be your signal to stop smoking as Mr. eloquent doesn't feel terribly comfortable in cigarette smoke. You promptly blow a cloud on his face and tell him to cough the fuck up.


"Ah...I have the misfortune to report, a terrible loss". Hems and Haws he.
"Go on".
Uh...This might come as a shock but it is my duty to report the truth as I know it to my superiors.
You clench your teeth and press on "I am very much interested in knowing the information you bring Lieutenant".
Well...The gentleman we have been put in security charge of has been found dead in his son's hospital ward. Reasons are heretofore unknown.

You feel two spots growing on you.
1. The coffee spot where the Dumb ass has spilled it
2. The spot of dread that starts from your gut and soon reaches your jockeys and twists them in a knot.

You knew it was a bad job. But your old man was adamant for you to take some job, any job. An MBA was too boring. You were too lazy to become a scientist, engineer or a lawyer though you had a sharp mind (or so the cute female professor told you), so you became a cop. Getting in was easy enough but the folly of your ways was clearly apparent sitting on the hard wooden chair in the supercilious superintendent's otherwise plush office, the next day. He deliberately put that hard chair for you to make you uncomfortable.


"Sloppy. Your feedback report told me. I was a fool to send you on such an important duty. I disregarded the subtle insinuations of your senior officers and trusted your rough talent and what do I get?" The ranting had just started and the old man was wheezing with effort.


"Sir according to the forensics report, the poison was mixed in the beer which came from the local wholesale liquor dealer. One of the cans had been tampered with. He drank it in the car. The delayed effect of the poison started to show up in the hospital when he went to see his son. Just the other day he had given a statement to " The Post" that there is no chance he would do such a thing as killing his own son. Its the emancipator business. I was only on the guard duty." You wish there was a diplomacy class for dupes like you.


"How subtly you have shirked your duty captain. Truly admirable. When the car was inside the garage wasn't it your duty to check it when, as you put it so eloquently YOU were on the guard duty?" Just listen to the asshole. Were you supposed to sip all the beers to check whether they were doctored or not? But you bite your lip and keep quiet.


"Now the National Agency of Investigation has taken the case from us and we're expected to co-operate with them. Your duty will now be to co-ordinate with them and please do not give me any chance to complain this time, I must tell you in no subtle terms."


After two days of the big scene the NAI people interrogate you for four hours about your one week stay at the politicians house. Their condescension is visible. They smirk at your answers, you take it silently.


You take the squad car and make a stop at the liquor wholesaler. He's been visited by the NIA and is visibly distraught. He repeats his statement. He had taken a new delivery boy for the northern end of the city. The lad was late thirtyish,said he was a student and needed a job to supplement his allowance, chiseled features, broad chest, bearded, intelligent looking, and no he didn't give his documents. He was seen studyning heavy books sitting on a box in the warehouse.


Whatever, none of your business, now that the NIA is here, you swear never to get involved in high voltage stuff, that is for the high fliers. You decide to drop by home on your way to headquarter. The old man has paralysis of the lower body. Though there is a nurse who comes thrice a week, he still needs all the attention he can get, and then some more. To be very frank he is a pain the "you know what", but the problem is you love him too much. To be a little more frank, you had a call from the army and to be most frank that was your heart's desire. But after your mother ran away with the milk delivery man, you didn't have the heart to leave him alone. So you never told him, had you had he would have packed and Fedexed you to fort honor. He thinks you are a worthless no brainer nincompoop, but that is a small price to pay to stay near him and take care of him in his old days. Sometimes you think he knows it all, the old shoe box where you have kept your army call letter looks a little askew sometimes.


His gruff abusive language is what you come back home to hear. Though it irritates the hell out of you, you chew your nails out if you don't find the same voice fighting a verbal battle right through the thin walls with the neighbouring joneses.


You scan the police frequencies on the car radio; the usual chit chat about murder on east street, car crash on Tall Elks, burglary on Link Road. You twirl the dial and you get news a channel. Its abuzz; "The recent johansen murder case has yielded a new clue, or we might say a new puzzle considering the state of the police investigation. Among the beer bottles of senator johansen police have found a bottle of a prescription anesthetic called ketamine. Why has the killer left a ketamine bottle at the crime scene? lets ask our crime expert Dr....."

Bloody hounds, and whats with these psychos? Why cant they just do their thing and walk away? Why do they have to create such a furore about everything. Even criminals are publicity hounds nowadays. Where are the good old days when the killings were done in the cover of the night without seeking attention? Nowadays the bastards deliberately leave clues behind to challenge the detectives.
You have reached home, you divert your mind from policing(as if it really was a concern), and send it straight to oblivion to save it from the barrage that is about to hit you as soon as you make the front door creak. You open the door, no sound; he must be sleeping, you consider it a blessing. You take a peek in the old man's room. he sleeps so peacefully, nothing moves. Wait, something is moving inside the sheet near his legs. You slowly edge up to it, fearing the old fox's wrath if he is awakened. You uncover the leg and there it is, hissing and crawling, green and venomous, sleek and dangerous, satisfied after biting and killing your father. The leg is blue with the venom that has already spread throughout the body. You fling the sheet away to reveal a bloated, blue dead father. The man you loved more than your life is dead because you were too busy saving a senator. And you know what, you suck even at that. You are so ashamed you feel like smashing all the mirrors in the world. You check his pulse with more optimism than the your brain permits, the results make a worse wreck out of you. There is a phone on the bedside, you want a doctor, a big knowledgeable man, who can just touch him with a magic wand and make him alive again. You reach for the receiver, you notice something unfamiliar through stinging tears in your eyes. You scrunch up your face to read the label of the bottle, the new bottle that you have never seen on his table. Its reads; KETAMINE- medical purpose only.
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You are on extended compassionate leave from the police force. The numbness has gone. A seething anger has taken its place. You have become "The Imprisonator"


42 comments:

The Rat... said...

dark....

no wonder u took a month to write it up....

kalpa said...

Simply marvellous...so perfect n as always, gripping n thrilling...
Luv ya blog so much..

Lord GJ said...

The KETAMINE suspense is awesome man.
Waiting impatiently for it to be unveiled !!

Confusion personified said...

needless to say..brilliant work.

lookin forward to the rest of it soon ! no more takin a month to deliver the next dose ok?

Confusion personified said...

oohh n i loved the characterizations...all of them :)

T-REX said...

@the rat...thank god it was dark enough for you.
@kalpa...thanks so much girl. YOu are always a rock.
@Lord GJ...Thanx...I agonized for very long for a link. The serial killer has to leave a mark after all.
@sapna...welcome back, thanx and keep reading.

bung_dvrchn said...

awesome, fascinating, incredible, marvelous, prodigious, shocking, stunning, surprising, unbelievable, wonderful ..wait i will think of some more of 'em adjectives and keep you posted...

Dr. Internet said...

Keep writing.

sanely insane said...

sir if u can plz change ure theme color...i swear to read ure story

T-REX said...

@Lord Bung..Your arrival at my blog has brought utter euphoria with it. Welcome again.

@Dr. internet...sure thanx.But i'm sure you've not read the story.

@sanely insane...I love this color man, I cant think of any other and i dont wanna give it a mushy look.

Dr Roshan R said...

good one.. always enjoy a twist in the tale...

Rohan said...

nice gripping, the third person narraative is a reminder of bunker 13 waiting for next insatallment

roaring sheep said...

i knew the wait would be worth something... but this great?
its time you get published and hard bound.
and i cant a month ... so whens the next post.

it could be a movie you know

T-REX said...

Dr. Roshan ...thanx for the comment. Its good to know established bloggers like my blog.

@rohan..man Thanx and welcome back on the scene..how be you? and yes bunker-13 is exactly what i had in mind when i was writing it. The second person narrative makes it automatically racy. Ders another book i found in an old books shop written in second person narrative "half asleep in frog pajamas" awesome book. try it sometime.

@madhuri...girl, you just made my day. If I ever make it to the book publishing stage, you can rest assured you'll se your name on the aknowledgements page.

Zeba Talkhani said...

Loved this. Read every word but still didn't understand a lil bit. Kinda confused now! But good work.

T-REX said...

@zeba...i am sorry you could not understand it, but feel happy that you liked it nevertheless. Thanks for dropping by. I'll keep up the incoherence.

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

mindblowing.

T-REX said...

@scarlet diaries...thank you soo much

Ann Dee said...

Dear T-Rex,

You write really well. But your selection of vocabulary makes it a little over-the-top and bumpy. A little attending to that and it will make your posts far more readable. And I want you to seriously consider making a career in fiction writing.

All the best!

T-REX said...

@Ann Dee...O my god you seriously think I write that good? Wow. Sure I'll use more understandable language from now on. Thanx a ton.

Ann Dee said...

yep dude, i really mean it.

Good luck

olive oyl said...

good lord. what do have in the morning that you write so well? :O

T-REX said...

@ olive oyl..spinach :D

thanks for coming. keep coming ok?

olive oyl said...

sure. i'll stalk your blog. so that the day you get famous i can bask in the glory as well by knowing you :p

T-REX said...

@ olive..Ah i wish.

olive oyl said...

my blessings are with you :|

olive oyl said...

you have a funny surname like i have (mine: chattopadhyay) :| introduce someone with your surname if you write a funny story.

T-REX said...

@olive oyl...yeah I have had my embarrassing moments because of my surname. Sure If i want to embarrass one of my characters the sure fire way will be to give it my surname. By the way whats with the epic fight at your blog?

olive oyl said...

trust me i know nothing about the epic fight or anything about the anonymous nincompoop :|

not that i mind. let them increase my comment numbers. i might become popular one day for this, you know, blog-social network and all that :|

you can also give my surname if you want to embarrass any soul in your book.

T-REX said...

lolz...but i think chattopadyay is apretty harmless surname. It only mildly embarrases you. Mone can totally humiliate and annihilate one's self respect

olive oyl said...

yeah..man with a 'guriya' in his name :p heehaw :p
*evil grin*

T-REX said...

see what i mean?

olive oyl said...

i had warned my two friends not to go on a commenting spree like that in my blog, but... :|
t-rex reminds me of rexona deo.

T-REX said...

T-Rex is a fearsome dinosaur(was) :/

ivy_^^ said...

the song uve put on ur blog...omg its like someone died u know n the africans r performing the last rituals before buryin the dead...change it !!! :'(

T-REX said...

@ivy...lolz it actually is an african song. the reason i have not changed it because i cant figure out how to do it. whenever i think of changing it, i have horrible visions of programming. :(

olive oyl said...

evil man, what makes you stay away from blogging for so long? :X

T-REX said...

@olive...My boss. I also have a pseudo intellectual boss you know. I told you he's a very bad man. anyways will write the next installmeny very, like very very soon.

Raghav said...

wonderfully written.
witty, yet dark.

liked it.

cant wait for chap 3

T-REX said...

Thank yo so much Raghav.

olive oyl said...

your very very soon = nearly two months. you deserve a bad boss :|

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

Piyush,

You got few awards at my blog..plz take them home ;)


Cheers